A loud rumbling sound followed by lighting, cracked across the sky. A few years ago, Laurie would have shivered at the sound and under no circumstances, laid a foot outside of her home. Today, as the cab trailed across the wet gravel roads, she sat unfazed. Living with a human who turns you into a punching bag tends to do that to a person.
For a moment, her vision was completely clouded- a mixture of the streaming drops on the widow pane and the water pool in her eyes. A flicker of doubt crossed her mind; one feel at the bandages wrapped around her knuckles was enough to remind her she made the right decision. The broken jaw she left him with was little solace, but she had had enough.
Throwing her head back on the head-rest, Laurie decided she’d wasted enough years on the fool to add another minute. She steered her thoughts to more important topics, like, choosing a flavor of ice cream to celebrate her regained freedom.
word count: 170 words. This story is in response to Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers photo prompt challenge. Thank you Priceless Joy for this week’s creative picture. Click on the highlighted link above to participate or to simply read some amazing flash fictions, the more the merrier.
This is great! I am so glad she is getting free of him! Enjoyed your story very much Ameena! There are two typos I wanted to point out if that’s okay. In the first paragraph, it should read…”laid a ‘foot’ outside of her home. And in the second paragraph, “…one feel ‘of ‘ the bandage…” Other than those two little tyos it is wonderful! And as always, thank you for participating in the Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers Challenge!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you Pj for notifying about the typos, I just corrected them now 🙂
LikeLiked by 1 person
I hope you don’t mind, but I know I would want to know before anyone else caught them. I really enjoyed your story!
LikeLiked by 1 person
WAY TO GO Laurie! Tell her to get a Double Scoop of ice cream, she deserves it! 🙂 Great story!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Hahaha, I will be sure to! 😁 double scoop, got it! She definitely deserves it
LikeLiked by 1 person
It’s so good she left him, and with a broken jaw.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Yeah, I’ll say he’s lucky to have escaped with only a broken jaw 🙂
LikeLiked by 1 person
I love your description of the double clouding. Wonderful!
LikeLiked by 2 people
Thank you Sue 🙂
LikeLiked by 1 person
This is wonderful, Ameena. She’s finally making her escape and leaving him with a broken jaw, as well! Really well done. 🙂
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you Louise. Yes she is. And making her escape was the best decision she could make. 🙂
LikeLiked by 1 person
Great post on the effects of domestic abuse. Well done. 🙂
LikeLiked by 2 people
Thank you. It is something that needs serious discussion. A story doesn’t even scratch the surface.
LikeLiked by 1 person
I know. I’ve posted a couple of times on the topic. 🙂
LikeLiked by 1 person
Glad to hear he did not escape the incident without injury…which is often the case. I think it’s great that she broke away and can begin to enjoy life without the tense moments and injuries she has experienced. No one should have to experience abuse…especially physical abuse. Great story .
LikeLiked by 1 person
I know! It is heart breaking to find the abusers often escaped untouched. I couldn’t have put it any better – no one deserves abuse.
LikeLike
Yeah! I’ll say he’s lucky to have escaped with only a broken jaw 🙂
LikeLike
It takes courage to make any life change, it takes double courage to make this kind of life change. Good story.
LikeLiked by 1 person
I just realised I haven’t replied this, my sincere apologies.
I does take double courage, if only it was as easy to do in reality as it is written. Thank you.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Great story! Strong messages there as she liberates herself towards a safe and better life.
It’s important for women to identify where to draw the line and how much to tolerate before calling it quits.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oh gosh, I just realised I haven replied this. My apologies.
I whole heartedly agree with you. Sometimes, you just have to walk away. No one deserves to be a punching bag.
LikeLiked by 1 person
That’s ok Ameena! Right now, I too have a few unanswered comments.
Such great people like you here at Word Press 🙂 Wonderful writers and very courteous too.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Poignant and well told, Ameena. No woman – and yes, sometimes a man – should be hit. In no way is that acceptable. Fortunately for her, she made the right decision to leave. There are many who fear leaving and end up in very bad places: cemeteries. Great choice togo this way with the prompt.
Isadora 😎
LikeLiked by 2 people
Wonderfully told story. I love that she is celebrating her emancipation with ice cream!
LikeLiked by 1 person
What better to celebrate than with a few scoops of ice-cream 😄. Thank you for stopping by.
LikeLiked by 1 person
I’m so glad that flicker of doubt didn’t change her decision.
Ellespeth
LikeLiked by 1 person
Me too. I couldn’t stop her from regaining her freedom. Thank you
LikeLike
Good one☺☺
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you! I’m glad you like it. ☺
LikeLiked by 1 person