I once met a girl on a journey,
She told me she was tired.
This world had broken her will to live,
Long sleep- was what she desired.
12 year old, me could not understand,
Why sleep with so much to wake for?
The stars in itself kept me up at night,
In awe of their beauty and creation.
I was a kid, and she was a kid,
Two beings with different experience,
She wanted to sleep,
My own days were too short-
Our route had no intersection.
I once met a girl on a journey,
And she told me she was tired,
Now I wonder if maybe I’d shown her my life,
Her skies might be a bit clearer.
Years have gone by, since my encounter
And I hope her grey clouds have departed;
There’s a twinge in my heart,
When I think of the past,
And there was little I did to help her.
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Very nice Ameena, but of course there is now a message for the future! 🙂
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Thank you Colin. It is a lesson learnt indeed for the future 🙂
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Wow Ameena, Such heartbreak and regret, He still thinks of her. You are such a talented poet Ameena. You write amazing stuff.
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Mandi you are a darling for such a wonderful comment ❤❤❤. And you are an amazing writer!!
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Very beautiful.
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Thank you very much 😊
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Such achingly eloquent and poignant work. I felt every tinge of heartache and regret.
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Aww, thank you very much for such a lovely comment. ❤❤
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Heart tugging poem again my beautiful friend! Only 2 years ago that I knew a 12 year old that mirrored the 12 year old in your first paragraph.. ❤
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Thank you Joy 😊😊. ❤❤❤
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The repetition of this two line “I once met a girl on a journey,
And she told me she was tired” hammers in an emotional journey when I read the poem. Is this a particular type of poetry? It reads like one but I cannot put my finger on the name.
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Hi 😄, actually, I didn’t write this in the form of a particular poem. Although, the story theme fits for me like that of a ballad. And for long rhyming poems, i feel the repetition helps to wrap up the poem.
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Oh ok. The repetition worked perfectly for the poem.
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I really enjoyed this poem! Such a grand way to tell a story.
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Thank you very much. I am glad you do 😊
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Such sincere lines! 🙂
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Aw, thank you Prakash, this one came easily
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This is beautiful. Thanks for sharing this Ameena.
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Thank you very much Joel. I am glad you like it.
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You’re welcome.
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Wonderful! Wish we could go back or time travel to past to help ourselves in such sotuations but yes we can work on our presentself and future can smile 🙂
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I agree… The past as inviting as it seems, all we can do is use its knowledge for the future. Thank you very much from taking the time to comment 🙂
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My pleasure!
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this is a heart tugging piece my dear. i believe you helped her in ways you can during that time. ❤
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Thank you very much Rosema❤️❤️❤️
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Beautiful!
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Thank you 😊
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Beautiful
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Thank you very much
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