Flash Fiction: In the moment

Flash Fiction: In the moment


D.I Lucy was led through a snow-covered narrow pathway which led to the penthouse’s door. Both sides were bordered by a variety of flowers consisting of chrysanthemums, oleanders; those were the only two she could identify under the blanket of ice which formed thorny cushions on the plants.

One in particular caught her gaze. Slowing her pace, she tried to place the flower in her mind. What was it called again?

It’s beautiful, isn’t it?”
D.I Lucy’s thoughts were interrupted by her guide who wasn’t much of a talker, which suited Lucy just fine.
“I noticed you staring at that flower a little longer“.

D.I Lucy managed a weak smile in return as they arrived the house door, making a mental note to check out the guide later on- she was observant. D.I Lucy made three sharp knocks on the door, bracing herself for the worst part of her job- breaking bad news.

Word count: 154 words. This story is in response to Flash Fiction for aspiring writers photo prompt challenge where each week we are given a picture and are to write a 75-175 word story surrounding it. Thank you very much @loniangraphics for this week’s photo.

17 thoughts on “Flash Fiction: In the moment

  1. This sounds like the beginning of a great, longer story, Ameena, or even a detective novel. I like the way you throw in Lucy’s thoughts about the observant guide, and that she’d come to this house to deliver bad news. All very intriguing, and it certainly makes us want to read more! Well written.


  2. I love this D.I. Lucy and I could see myself reading a whole murder mystery series featuring her *wink wink nudge nudge* sooo when will you be writing this D.I. Lucy murder mystery series Ameena :p

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Hahaha, thank you Jade. I actually love and enjoy writing about her character. I don’t know about a series, but you will definitely be seeing more Of her and her partner 😁😁

      Liked by 1 person

  3. I want to know more about the flower – why did it draw her attention so much, and what could it mean down the road? Is it a clue to something more, like the observant guide, or is it just a beautiful flower? 🙂 Nicely done.


Leave a Reply

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out /  Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out /  Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out /  Change )

Connecting to %s