Every other Saturday, Jianna and Rosy took a break from their busy school schedules and visited the neighbourhood park, playing their favourite pass-time, “cool or creepy”.
Rosy claimed, she had a gift of knowing people. She’d once read in a book that identical twins were born with supernatural gifts and had been obsessed with the idea ever since, firmly believing hers to be the gift to Judge a person at first sight. Jianna thought it to be nothing but a house wives tale, still, she indulged her twin sister
“So, what do you think about that guy there with the blue on blue?” Jianna asked
“Him? Definitely creepy”, Rosy replied casually.
Jianna took a good long look at the man and concluded, Rosy was just a weird person.
At night, in the comfort of her dormitory, Jianna turned on the radio to hear an alert about a man who had kidnapped a girl from the park. The only thing to identify him, he wore a blue shirt with a blue cap.
Word count: 171. The above story is in response to Flash Fiction For Aspiring Writers photo prompt challenge. Each week, a picture is given and we are to write a story of 75-175 words only. Thank you very much @The storyteller’s abode for this week’s photo.
I blame the dog.
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Yikes! The man did turn out to be creepy.
Your imagination is great! I would not have spun this tale from that picture. I’d have probably gone the predictable and boring route about a man and his dog blah, blah, blah. 😀
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Aw, thank you very much. I was at a lost at first but i found it wierd that the man was staring right at the camera (in the picture) and I just pictured a creepy scenerio. Glad you like it.
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Nice take to see something sinister in the prompt and well written. I have twins, still waiting to see any super powers from them 🙂
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That’s amazing, congratulations to you. Haha, Actually it is a belief in Northern Nigeria that twins are blessed with special gifts. 🙂
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I love how the blue on blue reared its head! Nicely written.
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Thank you very much. I am glad you like it. 🙂
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Wow! Rosy was right after all! She has the gift of knowing people at first glance! Great story, Ameena!
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Yes she was! Maybe jianna would start to believe too. Thank you PJ
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Great story Ameena!
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Amazing! That is kind of creepy.
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Hahaha,indeed it is! Thank you
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great concept and geez! i got goosebumps!!
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Oh my! Thank you Rosema ☺️
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always welcome dear. this is goood!
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Quite creative from just looking at that picture! You go girl!
OH and I did reply to your creative comments on my Dewey story Ha! Ha! And part 2 is posted.
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Wow! So interesting Ameena! Especially the fact that you introduced the twins who guide the story forward. The man and the dog are used so well in the story!
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Aw, thank you very much, I am glad you enjoyed it. 🙂
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Hey! I am attempting the NaNoWriMo this year. Interested? Would you like to join along, Ameena?
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I saw it the other on a different blog. I can’t this time of the year. I’ve got school six days a week plus I’m trying to do my dissertation.
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Good luck with all that busyness 🙂
We would do it together next year.
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I hope so too. 😊
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Have you started? (The message sent Incomplete)
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Starting on Nov 1! I am excited and nervous…
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ameena…you conveyed it in few words..great idea..
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Thank you very much Akhila. For some reasons, i found your comments in my spam. Probably a WordPress glitch.
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Ya..this has become a very common issue in wp
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Woah , Good one!
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Thank you very much 😊
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I live what you did here…
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Thank you Trae 😄
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Okaaayyy.These kind of things scare me.
Definitely creepy,but cool also because you wrote it. 😉
When I saw the picture it seemed all happy happy. 😛
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Hahhaa, thank you very much 😄. I actually found the picture a bit creepy, in the sense that the man was staring right at the camera.
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Hmmm I didn’t note that. XD
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Ha ha.. creepy was it! Very clever usage of prompt! Unique story! 🙂
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Thank you very much Prakash. For some reasons, the image gave me a creepy vibe,
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Frightening. Guess she really does know who’s creepy at least. Nice write Ameena 🙂
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She does have a gift for knowing. Thank you
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I like where your mind went with this.
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Thank y very much. Glad you like it 😊
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It appears that Rosy’s intuition kicked in, but Jianna’s did not. She probably has other abilities that Rosy doesn’t have or perhaps this one is just delayed. 🙂 Clever… creepy story. 🙂
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Haha, Jianna does have her own different abilities. She just doesn’t know it yet, thank you ,
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Scary. I hope they can give a detailed description of the man.
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Hahaha, I found this in my spam again 😂😂. Seriously WP?!
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I cherish how the blue on blue raised its head! Pleasantly written…thanks for share…
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