“Hey, that’s enough”, he screamed.
Apparently, I’d been staring at the sunflowers for so long I might as well cast an evil eye on them.
“But they are so pretty”, I retorted. He came and stood between the flowers and I which was preposterous comsidering I towered over him in height.
“I am Sara by the way”. I said
“And I’m Amir. Please lower your gaze.. evil eye”. He pleaded, seeing as I wasn’t budging.
“Okay, okay”, I backed down.
Amir had sterling gray eyes with scruffy blonde hair, of which a few strands fell over his forehead. He wore plaid shirt and grey shorts which were pulled up to his navel. He looked like a cartoon character but in an appealing way.
“Want to be friends?” I asked.
“sure” he replied after a pause, “as long as you don’t stare at me the way you do those flowers”
We both laughed.
“first things first though”, I remarked looking him over, “we need to lower those shorts to your waist for starters”.
word count: 173 words. *this is an edited version of the original piece I posted a while ago, I didn’t like how it turned out so I tweaked it a bit. Thank you Priceless Joy for hosting this challenge and helping us to practice writing.* This post is in response to Flash Fiction For Aspiring Writers photo prompt challenge.ย
Cool!
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Thank you! ๐
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haha…great story ๐
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Thank you! I’m glad you like it ๐
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You are welcome. I did, very much so ๐
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Creative story! LOL about the pants! Sooooo does the friendship move on to more than friendship??? Will we ever know and do the sunflowers die from her evil eye? ๐
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Thank You Joy. The story didn’t actually turn out the way I expected it too, I guess I need to practice more writing ๐. Haha, I think the they ate going to be stuck in the “friend zone”. And the flowers, hmm, it depends in what you believe ๐
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the word is “budging” not “bulging”, I love the voice, would like to write in this voice. How do you do that, or is that just how you sound in person?
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Thank you for the correction, I have edited it now. Ah, I wish I had an answer to that. I just wrote it without much consideration to the voice. I’m glad you like it tho.
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Cute story Ameena. Glad they could be friends despite her ‘evil eye, and his shorts which were too high. It gave me a laugh ๐
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Thank you Mandi! ๐ Sometimes differences can lead to friendship, I’m glad it gave you a laugh ๐๐ฝ
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How creative! I wouldn’t have thought “evil eye” from looking at this photo LOL
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Thank you Jade!๐. Hopefully the evil eye wouldn’t make the flowers wilt as Amor believed ๐
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This is really cute Ameena! I could picture this cute little boy that looked like a cartoon character and Sara, towering above him! Wonderful story! Just a reminder for you to link up to InLinkz. If you already have done so, then disregard, I haven’t seen the email about it yet.
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Thank you very much Pj, glad you liked it! ๐
I have linked it. ๐
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Yes, I did see that but for some strange reason, InLinkz didn’t send me a notification email on it.
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nice cute story..
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Thank you for reading it. And I’m glad yoU like it. โบ๏ธ
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haha a cute story ! ๐
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Thank you sis! โบ๏ธโบ๏ธ
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Hmm, i see they will make great friends (may be for a night though) ๐
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Hahaha, their friendship is for a lifetime I should think ๐
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This was sort of cute ๐
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Haha, Thank you Hiba! ๐
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Nice story!
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Thank-you very much Lynz ๐
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I agree with Amir, I would not want you giving me the evil eye either. By the way, what did the sunflower do you?
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Hahaha! It was the beauty of the sunflower which elicited the stares ๐
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Haaaaahaha, if you say so but sunflowers are just gorgeous, so I will let that explanation slide :P.
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Nice! ๐ The evil eye is powerful. But, he found out that she wasn’t so bad after all.
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Haha, yes he did! And they became best of friends afterwards ๐
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Amaaazing mahn!!
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