Old lady Darcy, getting a high five from the ladies. The tales that woman spins from the webs of her mind are a wonder. It makes me want to be like her when I get older, always the life of a crowd.
Walking past is Feisty Fanny. It seems her and Danny boy have had another of their fights. Three kids and no ring. I wonder what you’d say If you heard that about me mama. I guess we’ll cross that ocean when we get there.
The lovebirds at the corner are probably deciding over wedding things. I hear, blonde-Lady Janet says they won’t last cause their’s was a whirlwind romance. She’s over forty and never married, I think that speaks for Itself.
And then there’s me, still the phantom of every crowd. You always said, when I got older I’d be the flower in everyone’s garden. All I had to do is wait. Well, I sure am waiting mama, only thing, you’re not here to see it.
word count: 168 This is my very late response to Flash Fiction For Aspiring Writers photo prompt challenge. Thank you @thestoryteller’sabode for such a wonderful picture.
Interesting take on the picture. Is there a word-count limit? This could be expanded, turned into a tearjerker, if you had the words to play with.
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Yes, there is a word count, 150 word (+/- 25). And thank you.
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Wonderful job Ameena.
Have a wonderful Sunday and week.
🙂 ❤
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Thank you Stacy 😊. Have a lovely week too
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Made me feel good, nice to be everybody’s love. No?
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Love it Sis 🙂 nicely expressed in less words.
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Haha, Thank you Sana. 😊
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I liked your speakers voice. How she talked. It suited the story well. She sees everything happening around her and nobody sees her. She doesn’t even have her Mama anymore. I am upset for her because I think she was the rose in her mother’s garden but I do not think anyone else sees her. There is a Woodsworth poem it reminds me of, especially the second stanza:
“She dwelt among the untrodden ways.”
(William Wordsworth, 1770 – 1850)
She dwelt among the untrodden ways
Beside the springs of Dove,
A Maid whom there were none to praise
And very few to love:
A violet by a mossy stone
Half hidden from the eye!
—Fair as a star, when only one
Is shining in the sky.
She lived unknown, and few could know
When Lucy ceased to be;
But she is in her grave, and, oh,
The difference to me!
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Oh God, what a sad ending to the poem. Thank you so much for sharing the poem, I haven’t read it before. I think I know only a few of woodsworth poems, with the one about daffodils, stuck with me.
I’m going to check the complete poem.
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Great. Yes it is sad but it’s beautiful. Thanks.
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What a entertaining piece! Feisty Fanny, Cracked me up! And ended on a sentimental note. Great job!
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Haha, I’m glad it did. I have no idea where the Feisty fanny idea came from?! 😄 😄 glad you like it.
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Excellent writing!
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Thank you so much!
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Great spin on the prompt! I love it Ameena! Very sad at the end though that her mother isn’t around to be with her. Great story!
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Thank you Pj. I love the photo prompt.
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It is a beautiful photo! I loved what you wrote!
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A poignant take on the prompt, beautifully written. Love it!
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nice job ameena……nice work
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Thank you 😄
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u r from where?
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I’m from Nigeria
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oh…..I thought u r from INDIA…..nice to know… 🙂
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Haha, I’ve been getting that a lot these days 😄
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y?
anybody else asked u abt ur nation?
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Ha, I’m glad it did. I have no idea where it came from?! 😄.
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Lovely piece.
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Thank you 😊
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That was such a pleasurable read. While looking at the photo, I was thinking about the details, the people and the scenery.You translated every bit of this photo into beautiful words.Simply loved it.
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Thank you Lala, I appreciate it. The photo was inspiring. Thanks for reading. 😄
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