He tried to fix her
But she wasn’t broken;
She had the prettiest eyes,
And behaved in the strangest way-
So quiet, yet observant;
And that was just-
Who she was,
Who she ever wanted to be ;
He couldn’t see that;
He kept trying to fix her-
But she wasn’t broken.
He should have tried Elfy. Specially on her lips. Might have helped.
Nice one though
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Haha, Thank you!
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:p
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The message here is correct on so many levels. How many people have been falsely diagnosed, or “labelled” with a condition they do not have, or treated incorrectly. Of course the reverse scenarios are also true. May be an opportunity for a “debate” sometime in the future. Very thought provoking Ameena. 🙂
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That was so my point! As long as certain things don’t fit our ideas, then it doesn’t matter anymore because we’ve already closed them up as “not normal”.
Hahah, maybe. Thank you very much. It really disturbs me when people, as you said, are falsely labeled.
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I relate to this so much; lovely writing! 🙂
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Thank you Georgette! I am glad you do 💕
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Beautiful writing! “He tried to fix her, but, she was not broken”. ❤
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Thank you dear! ❤❤
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Pleasure is all mine dear! ❤ 🙂
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Terrific piece, I love the image you painted of her (and him) in such short words.
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Thank you very much. This is probably the on the shortest pieces I have written.☺
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Beautiful. I have written a couple of pieces similar to this idea. Broken, healing, freedom, etc.
🙂
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Thank you! Nice, I will check it out. 😄😄
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Here are two if you would like to check them out:
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Very well weaved.
How deep is the extent of the brokenness of her not so broken self. amazing!
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Thank you! ❤❤
Now I love what you just said about her brokenness!
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😘
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a nice write!
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Thank you dear 😄
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People always be thinking you’ve lost some nuts, just because you are different.. #smh. Humans, forever wired to oppose things that are different or new.
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Exactly!! we are just the way we are, without needing any twitching or fixing.
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PS: I don’t usually get poems, but this. This I got. 👌
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Thank you very much for the great complement! 🙌
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You’re welcome dear. You deserve it.. 😉
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The feelings are conveyed perfectly well… Beautiful!
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Thank you very much!! 😊
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You are welcome Ameena! 🙂
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Lovely.
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Thank you 😄
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Great poem! Sad that he could not realize that she did not need fixing!
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It really is… He couldn’t accept her the way she was.
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Claps…..
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Hey, thanks *curtseys* 😁
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Touche.
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I know!! Thank you 😄
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This is wonderful Ameena!
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Thank-you very much Pj 😊
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But how do you write such poems at your age? :0
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I just find it easy to put myself in others shoes, and the words tend to come. 😄
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I do understand this. And it needs an evolved mind to do that. Keep producing good work. God bless!
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Like you can never understand her! Nice one.. 🙂
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Hahah. Welcome back Prakash! 😄😄 and thank you
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Lovely writing ❤
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Hahaha, welcome back Prakash! 😄😄 and thank you.
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Thank you very much! 😄
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Wow..! That was So deep and insightful.
This is so relevant to the relationship today..people try to ‘fix’ the ones they love instead of accepting them as they are.
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Thank you Hargun 😊. Exactly! That was the while point of this. We should learn to accept.
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True that 🙂
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Absolutely wonderful. Loved every word. Thankfully, she wasn’t broken.
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Thank you very much! No, She wasn’t broken 😄
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Really enjoyed it. I love your writing style.
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You have such a way with words!! So glad I am getting caught up on your posts! My days are just not the same when I don’t have time to read your posts! 🙂
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I know, busy days right?! Aww, I appreciate it Joy ❤❤❤❤
Your comments put a smile on my face ☺.
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