It was July 17, how can I forget that day. After a week-long raining spell, the roaring of thunder paused, clouds parted and rays of sunshine flooded us with their warmth. Dressed in a floral patterned gown, a silver head-scarf and my most valuable possessions packed in a medium-sized traveling bag, I stood… Waiting.
A new dawn awaited me, us, one under no circumstance I was going to let slip out of my fingers. We were going to be happy, start a new life somewhere. I’ld look for a teaching job while he’ll start a garage. Our own fairy tale, one we had planned out and thought we deserved.
17th July, 5.10pm… The tears, staining my pancaked cheeks. The train hooting, grazing the rails with its iron tires. I hoped, prayed, envisioned him running with his suitcase screaming, “I’m here now”; but he never showed up. Oh how I wished the train sounds could flutter away with the broken pieces of my heart. It tore me apart because deep down- I wasn’t surprised he didn’t show.
Word Count: 175 words. This story is in response to Flash Fiction For Aspiring Writers photo prompt challenge hosted by Priceless Joy. Thank you to “the storyteller’s abode” for this week’s captivating picture.
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Oh my gosh, how sad! š„ I wonder why he didn’t show? Was it his fault? A very sweet – sad tale of love lost. It must have hurt more knowing that you aren’t surpised he didn’t show. Excellent story Ameena and thank you for participating in the Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers challenge!
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Thank you Pj. Yeah, that’s actually what hurt her the most, more than him not showing up. The fact that she hoped and almost believed he will. š
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That is so sad. We want to believe something so bad but are disappointed.
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That’s a very heart breaking story. Especially, that she wasn’t surprised he didn’t show. Great job!
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Thank you Mandi. It is heart breaking. It’s like knowing someone is trouble but still not being able to let go of them.
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Great story, great writing!
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Thank you very much! š
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A very sad ending for her – after all those weeks of planning and waiting. It seems strange that she, perhaps, doubted his sincerity all along. I suppose she just lived in hope that she was wrong and everything would go as planned. It was cruel of him to keep her hanging on to her hopes – unless he just got cold feet at the end. Nicely done, Ameena.
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It is sad, I wouldn’t want to be in her shoes. She knew deep down there was a possibility he wouldn’t give it all up for “them”, yet she hoped. If I could do an epilogue, he’d realize his mistake and chase after her. š
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It would make a lovely epilogue, Ameena. š
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Aww this is a sad but beautiful story. I feel sorry for that poor girl =(. Knowing deep down that it would end this way but she still went with a little bit of hope in her hear. Awww. Well done!
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Thank you! I know, it sucks to be left hanging by the one you love.
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Great piece
Love the end
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Thank you Sheldon. I’m glad you like it š
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Wonderful heart wrenching story! So sad that she had to go through that. I’m wondering if perhaps she had some inkling that he would not show, but she could not bring herself to believe it. Great emotional story.
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Thank you very much Jc. I know, I wouldn’t want to be in her place :(. She did have an inkling but she hoped against hope. š
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Oh man, I am hoping that the only reason he did show up was unfortunate news on his part. Not that I am asking for tragic things to happen to him but it would suffice as the only reason for the sad ending.
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I wish it was unfortunate news, but I believe she knew the man she was in love with. And was just hoping she was wrong about him not showing up.
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Oh noooo but ok. *disappointed in him*
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well done Ameena – this was beautifully written, a great read š
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Thank you! I’m glad you like it. After a few flash fiction bordering on humor, I thought a sad should be fitting.
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This is really beautifully told. I love the first person narrative. I love the happiness and the hope symbolised by the passing of the bad weather. And the surprise ending caught me too- somewhere, deep down she had known!
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Thank you very much. Ah, I love how you break it down š. It was sad that he stood her up but with her narrating, it shows she’s thrived even without him.
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Such a beautifully sad story, Ameena. It’s especially sad that she suspected all along that he wouldn’t show. You captured the character’s voice really well in the narrative.Nicely done. š I’m glad you found the picture captivating. š
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Thank you Louise. The picture was highly inspiring. š
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I am in awe of your ability to inject such pathos into a story with so few words. You conjure the scene so expertly and then grab at the heart-strings. Beautiful.
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Thank you very much TJ for your lovely words. I truly appreciate it.
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You are most welcome. āŗ
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Thus is saddening but the same time had an excitement about the end
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It is sad that he didn’t show š. But in the end, the show must go on š
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Heartbreaking, yet so beautiful.
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Thank you Aakansha. It really is a heartbreaking situation š¦
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Well done š I wonder if you’d mind checking out my blog, too? š
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You, my friend, have been selected: https://izzyreadson.wordpress.com/2015/09/08/infinity-dream-award/
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Yess!! šš Thank you Izzy for the nomination
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Oh no:( How sad:( And on my birthday, too.
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Oohhh, for the birthday part, I am sorry. But, I chose that day because, July 17, is actually a date pretty close to my heart. āŗ
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Awww it’s ok;) it’s sweet to know that it’s close to your heart:) Lovely story nonetheless!
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It is sad that he didn’t show š. But, in the end, the show must go on. š
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