Flash Fiction: Blackouts 8

Flash Fiction: Blackouts 8

                                    *After the interrogation*
Staring at a picture of the stolen Madame Trousoule painting, the detectives couldn’t help but gaze at it’s beauty.
“It’s a view of paradise on earth,” one of the two detectives exclaimed, “Miss Blake has a good taste when it comes to artifacts, I’ld give her that.” He appeared to be in his fifties with wrinkles and poorly managed gray hair.

His partner was a Hispanic young man of average height and slender built who looked not more than late-twenties. He in turn spoke, “Miss Blake did look bewildered towards the accusation, in fact, it was like she had no idea what the heck we were talking about.”

“Ah, don’t let her fool you boy, I say she’s just a great actress,” the older detective said. “When you hear the name Blake, trust me, it’s trouble.” Seeing the confused look on his young partner’s face, he added, “let’s just say, Richard Blake and I go way back and there’s no love lost between us.”

With that the older detective left the interrogation room, leaving the young Hispanic to ponder if Allison Blake really is more than meets the eyes.

Flash Fiction For Aspiring Writers challenge. Word count: 188 sorry PJ, I had to go over on this one. This part is a direct continuation of part7. I felt the need to round up on this photo prompt seeing  as there’s going to be another next week. So, here it is, my second submission this week.

25 thoughts on “Flash Fiction: Blackouts 8

  1. So the older detective doesn’t like Allison and has poisoned the mind of the younger detective. Does she deserve this? I will have to go back and read some of the past stories because my mind doesn’t remember. Yikes! Getting old stinks!

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    1. Thank you very much :). Or maybe, it’s she who is masterminding the whole thing? Haha, I just started off on this week’s own, hopefully will be done today. Thank you so much for your interest.

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  2. Well, It seems I’ll have to wait for the next episode to find out what’s behind all this. Is she or isn’t she guilty – or is her father behind the theft? And what went on between him and the older detective? Complex and exciting story Ameena. 🙂
    Just one point I’d like to mention about punctuation, so I hope you don’t mind.
    When writing speech, when you come to the closing speech marks, they always go after the punctuation, whether it’s a full stop, comma, question mark etc. For example:
    “Miss Blake has a good taste when it comes to artifacts, I’ll give her that.” (Full stop before speech marks.)
    There are several places where you have the speech marks first. 🙂

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    1. Oh Thank you so much. This has been a great help! I have been struggling with deciding if it punctuation should be within the quotation marks or not. I really really appreciate the correction. 🙂

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      1. Thank goodness for that, Ameena. I was wondering whether I’d offended you – which wasn’t my intention at all. 🙂 I haven’t done any flash fiction this week because I’m in Spain, doing research for my third book. I’ll be back to doing some in a week’s time, though. I know you are very busy, too, with your studies. Writing ff is a nice diversion, if you can manage to fit it in. 🙂


  3. Everyone’s pretty much touched on my thoughts after reading (I’m happy I’ve caught up and had two parts to read with this prompt), so I’ll just say thank you for continuing this mysterious drama and weaving in intriguing characters. I love it! ❤

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    1. Hahaha, I know that feeling 😀 . I always love it when I find out I don’t have to wait an extra week anymore. Awww, thank you very much Izzy. And I do hope you continue your mystery.

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  4. Hahaha, I know that feeling :D. I always love it when I find out I don’t have to wait an extra week anymore. Awww, thank you very much Izzy. And I hope you do continue your mystery.


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