Flash Fiction: Blackouts 4

Flash Fiction: Blackouts 4


Upon Richard Blake’s arrival to Willow’s Place, Allison wasted no time in relaying to him the events of her divorce, return of her blackouts and the poster left for her. Richard listened with utmost attention and when Allison was done speaking, he said, “let’s take a drive”.
“To where?” Allison questioned suspiciously.
“To the most colorful part of town”, Richard replied with a grin.

Allison turned her gaze to the houses lining the streets of Balmary as Richard drove through. She focused on the passers-by, all in an attempt to block out any unwanted conversations Richard, her father, might decide to spring up.

All was well until Allison cried out, “I don’t know what to make of all these”. “My head is in a wobble”. Richard brought the car to a halt and turned to his daughter.

Β  Β  Β “Am I- am I going nuts again“, Allison asked, tears welled up in her eyes.

“No, baby girl”, Richard replied reassuringly, then added in a rather grim tone, “I believe someone is trying to make it look that way”.

Word count: 176. This story is in response to Flash Fiction for Aspiring writers photo prompt challenge. I exceed the allowed word count by (1 word) πŸ˜€ will try harder next time. This is also the fourth part on the series “Blackouts”: part 1, part2, part 3.

Β  Β  Β  Β  Β  Β Do you think Richard is genuinely trying to help his daughter, or is he just blowing smoke?Β 

36 thoughts on “Flash Fiction: Blackouts 4

  1. Excellent Ameena! I went back and re-read the previous installments and loved how they all tied in together. You are an excellent story writer as well. I love how Allison has healed her relationship with her father and he is now helping her.

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    1. Hahaha, you And priceless joy have contradicting opinions on Richard :D. Thank you Prakash and I agree, I think I need to go deeper with Allison for the next part and show the strength of her character. This really helps πŸ™‚

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  2. I’ll be interested to find out where the relationship between Allison and her dad is heading. I love the way you refer to the most colorful part of tow. It suits that street well. πŸ™‚

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    1. Thanks Millie πŸ˜„ and i really appreciate your interest in this story. I am actually still considering which path to take on their relationship. Hopefully the next photo prompt will help me decide ☺

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  3. I am still not sure what to think of Richard yet. You previously said two things he gave a damn about were his kids, so I do not want to judge him wrong too fast. Let me see what Part 5 says. πŸ˜€

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  4. I again wasn’t ready for this to end! And you being just 1 word off from the word count is great! Shoot, I find it hard to keep my Sunday Flash Fiction to 200 words! You did great! I want to believe that Richard is honestly trying to help her but am not 100percent sure yet. I want to see inside his brain πŸ™‚

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  5. This is turning out well… The story got even more complicated!
    And according to me, if he is really her father, he should help her genuinely. Perhaps he said the last line just to cheer her up. Or maybe he knows something and hinting at it. πŸ˜€

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  6. Seems like Richard knows more than he’s letting on but hopefully he’s still trying to help and protect his daughter. I liked the ‘colourful part of town” too. Your stories are all linking together nicely Ameena.

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    1. Thank you very much. I was hoping that they’d link together. I’m glad they do. Thank-you very much, hopefully the next few parts will shed some light on Richard’s intention. πŸ™‚


  7. Ameena, I wanted to take this opportunity to tell you how happy I am that you are a part of the FFfAW Weekly Writers group. I love reading your stories and you bring a wonderful element and ingredient to the writing group. I hope you will continue participating and I look forward to reading your future stories. I know how busy you are and I appreciate the time you take to write a story and submit it. ((Hugs!)) PJ

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